Nina Veru
AP-Bio, C-Odd
Current Event 10
12/6/17
Rabin, Roni Caryn. “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds.” The New York Times, The New York Times, 6 Dec. 2017, www.nytimes.com/2017/12/06/health/birth-control-breast-cancer-hormones.html?rref=collection%2Fsectioncollection%2Fhealth&action=click&contentCollection=health®ion=rank&module=package&version=highlights&contentPlacement=1&pgtype=sectionfront.
In her article, Roni Caryn Rabin addresses the increased chance of developing breast cancer in women using hormonal contraceptives. Rabin discusses a Danish study of about 1.8 million women. The study found that out of 100,000 women on birth control, there were 68 breast cancer patients compared to 55 cases of breast cancer out of 100,000 non-users. In older methods of birth control, the hormone estrogen was used and shown to have associated risks. Now the hormone progestin is commonly used in modern birth control methods. Although this hormone is safer, scientists are beginning to wonder if it is leading to breast cancer.
Dr. Marisa Weiss is an oncologist, who founded breastcancer.org. Throughout her career, she has been studying hormones effects on cancer. While comparing older birth control to younger ones, Weiss claims, “Gynecologists just assumed a lower dose of hormone meant a lower risk of cancer. But the same elevated risk is there. It’s small but it’s measurable, and if you add up the millions of women taking the pill, it is a significant public health concern.”
Due to the large amount of women that use oral contraceptives, this study shows great importance, and further study is needed. This recent study was limited because the authors were unable to take in account alcohol consumption, breast feeding, and physical activity. It is also interesting to note that hormonal birth control reduces the risks of ovarian, colorectal, and endometrial cancers later in life.
The study also mentioned how as you age, the risk for cancer increases. Therefore older women who use hormonal contraceptives are at a much elevated risk for breast cancer opposed to those who are not. In addition, the longer one uses hormonal birth control leads to an increased risk of breast cancer. Due to these facts, Dr. Weiss suggests switching to hormonal free contraceptives; she claims, “It's not like you don’t have a choice.”
I chose to review this article because it is related to the reproduction unit that we are doing in class. In addition, I believe this is a very important issue due to the fact that 1.5 million American women rely on birth control contraceptive and noncontraceptive uses. I enjoyed how the author compared old and new methods of contraceptives. In addition, I liked how the author mentioned how the current study could have been improved by adding additional environmental factors. However, I would have liked if the author explained some concepts better, for I found myself to be lost at times.
Mairead Cain
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A.P. Biology
7 December 2017
Rabin, Roni Caryn. “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds.” The New York Times, The New York Times, 6 Dec. 2017, www.nytimes.com/2017/12/06/health/birth-control-breast-cancer-hormones.html?rref=collection%2Fsectioncollection%2Fhealth&action=click&contentCollection=health®ion=rank&module=package&version=highlights&contentPlacement=1&pgtype=sectionfront.
Nina did a very nice job with her current event review on the article “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds.” from the New York Times. I decided to review her report as the title of the original article is rather intriguing and raises many questions. There are many good techniques she uses throughout the report. One example is how she gives detailed definitions of each unknown vocabulary word that was present in the original report. This allows readers a deeper understanding and familiarity with the topic at hand. Another aspect of Nina’s writing that was done rather well was when she gave statistics concerning the study. This gives readers an insight about how birth control pills can lead to breast cancer. Lastly, I appreciated how Nina found opportunities to interject quotes into her current event report. These quotes gave relevant information and a deeper understanding of the source material being used.
Overall, Nina’s report was extremely interesting and informative, however there are some details that she could tweak and add to make her current event article even that much stronger. I recommend that she explains how, exactly, the discoveries being made will impact the future of medicine. This would have been beneficial because it would have given readers a worldly connection to the information provided in the report. Also, she could have given her own input on the subject matter as this study is surely controversial. This would have granted readers an even better understanding of the source material.
Nina’s report was very informative and I learned extensively about how different there are still links to birth control pills. Before reading the report, I had little knowledge about how breast cancer is being linked to birth control pills. Countless people across the world are affected by and suffer from Breast Cancer. If there is a possibility that breast cancer can be prevented in some patients, then researchers have to figure out how to do this.
Isabella Dibbini
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AP Biology
6 December 2017
Rabin, Roni Caryn. “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds.” The New York Times, The New York Times, 6 Dec. 2017, www.nytimes.com/2017/12/06/health/birth-control-breast-cancer-hormones.html?rref=collection%2Fsectioncollection%2Fhealth&action=click&contentCollection=health®ion=rank&module=package&version=highlights&contentPlacement=1&pgtype=sectionfront.
Nina wrote an excellent review on the article: “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds” by Roni Caryn. To start with, Nina developed an accurate summary of Caryn’s article, including all of the main arguments. In addition, her review is very detailed, making it very interesting. Lastly, she does a good job of supporting her ideas with quotes from the article. For example, she quotes Dr. Marisa Weiss, an oncologist, when she states, “Gynecologists just assumed a lower dose of hormone meant a lower risk of cancer. But the same elevated risk is there. It’s small but it’s measurable, and if you add up the millions of women taking the pill, it is a significant public health concern.”
Overall, this review is extremely well written, however, there are a few small things that would make it even better. For instance, Nina could have added her view on this topic. Also, if she wanted to make her article even more interesting, she could include outside research to support her ideas.
After reading Nina’s review of the article “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds” by Roni Caryn, I learned a lot of new information that I was previously unaware of. Overall, I really enjoyed reading this review and believe that Nina did a great job.
Robby Schetlick
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Current Events Comment
December 7 2017
Citation: Rabin, Roni Caryn. “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds.” The New York Times, The New York Times, 6 Dec. 2017, www.nytimes.com/2017/12/06/health/birth-control-breast-cancer-hormones.html?rref=collection%2Fsectioncollection%2Fhealth&action=click&contentCollection=health®ion=rank&module=package&version=highlights&contentPlacement=1&pgtype=sectionfront.
Nina Veru’s review was of the article “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds” by the New York Times. Veru’s article is coherent, evidence based, and unique. All of Veru’s ideas follow a linear flow and are easy for the reader to follow. The vocabulary used is simple to understand, and all of her terms are defined if they are not commonly used. Each of her paragraphs follows the topic sentence directly, and each one has its own central idea which is helpful to the reader for organizational purposes. For example, one of her topic sentences is “Due to the large amount of women that use oral contraceptives, this study shows great importance, and further study is needed…” She follows up with this idea in the same paragraph, and ties it together nicely at the end, but still leaves it open for discussion. The second thing she does well is use evidence from the article to support her paragraph ideas. She quotes Dr. Marisa West frequently, which makes her review stronger by being based in the text. The third she she does well is use a refreshing organizational structure. It is not the same 3-2-1 paragraph format, but it still works as she covers all the requirements and is able to attract readers on the blog by being different.
There are always things to improve upon, and Veru’s review is no exception. The first thing she could do to improve her work would be to go deeper into the topic. Her ideas are strong, but very basic and don’t scratch the surface. Coming up with controversial questions to ask the reader might be a possible way to deepen the discussion and make her article more interesting. Another thing she could do to improve her review would be to compare it to similar articles on other websites. See how the author specifically displays the information relative to other articles. This can help strengthen her third paragraph or “section” in this case which is critiquing the article itself.
This event report taught me about the importance of reviewing old materials to find new evidence. It also informed me of the growing risks and problems with America’s contraceptive addiction because of a change in culture. I choose this article because it is a relevant topic in many political discussions today as well as popular culture. Biology is important in protecting our nation from rising problems, like this one, because biologists can detect and identify key trends which suggest that something needs to be done to address the problem. Hopefully, in the near future, there will be a better solution to his problem.
Peyton Kinon
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Current Event #10 Comment
12/7/17
Citation:
Rabin, Roni Caryn. “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds.” The New York Times, The New York Times, 6 Dec. 2017.
Hyperlink: www.nytimes.com/2017/12/06/health/birth-control-breast-cancer-hormones.html?rref=collection%2Fsectioncollection%2Fhealth&action=click&contentCollection=health®ion=rank&module=package&version=highlights&contentPlacement=1&pgtype=sectionfront
Nina’s current event is well written. She does a good job explaining the question which the scientist in her current event attempted to answer. She very clearly explains that, according to a Danish study of 200000 women, 13 more people who used hormonal contraceptives got breast cancer than those who didn’t use birth control. She described this in a way which was easy to understand. She also does a good job at pointing out possible sources of error in the experiment. She says that physical activity, age, alcohol consumption, and other factors which the women in the study did could either raise or lower your risk of cancer. This is important when analyzing the data and determining whether or not the experiment’s results were just a fluke. Finally Nina did a good job at listing the other alternatives to hormonal contraceptives, such as hormone free contraceptives, which possibly don’t prevent cancer.
While the article is mostly well written, there are a few times where is doesn’t flow so well. For example in the first paragraph, she writes “ Rabin discusses a Danish study of about 1.8 million women. The study found that out of 100,000 women on birth control, there were 68 breast cancer patients compared to 55 cases of breast cancer out of 100,000 non-users.” These sentences could have been condensed into a single sentence to make it more coherent. Also, a couple times throughout the current event there are some misplaced commas. For example, in the second paragraph, she writes “Dr. Marisa Weiss is an oncologist, who founded breastcancer.org.” There should not be a comma in between “oncologist” and “who”. This could have simply been fixed through proofreading.
I think this is a big problem. If progestin is proven to cause breast cancer, then scientists will have to find a new drug which works just as well but doesn’t cause cancer. I chose this article because it sounds like an interesting topic which is relevant to the majority of the population. This will change my perception of life if I ever become a doctor, because then I will try and fix this problem.
Hannah Beldotti
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Current Event 10
December 6, 2017
Rabin, Roni Caryn. “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds.” The New York Times, The New York Times, 6 Dec. 2017, www.nytimes.com/2017/12/06/health/birth-control-breast-cancer-hormones.html?rref=collection%2Fsectioncollection%2Fhealth&action=click&contentCollection=health®ion=rank&module=package&version=highlights&contentPlacement=1&pgtype=sectionfront.
I chose to read Nina Veru’s current event on, “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds,” by Roni Caryn Rabin. I chose this current event because cancer in general is very relevant to our society in general as medicine and technology are advancing. I thought that Nina did a great job of reviewing the article as she incorporated great details through quotes. For example when she says, “While comparing older birth control to younger ones, Weiss claims, “Gynecologists just assumed a lower dose of hormone meant a lower risk of cancer. But the same elevated risk is there. It’s small but it’s measurable, and if you add up the millions of women taking the pill, it is a significant public health concern.” Also, Nina made sure to explain the occupation of whoever she mentioned in her review along with their relevance to the topic being discussed. For example, she states, “Dr. Marisa Weiss is an oncologist, who founded breastcancer.org. Throughout her career, she has been studying hormones effects on cancer.” Although Nina had great aspects to her review, there were a couple of point she could have made more prominent in order to better her review. For example, she could have went into more depth on the specifics using data from outside research. This would have show the reader the prevalence of the study. Also, she could have included what treatments are new and upcoming in order to provide a solution.
Overall, I though Nina did a great job writing her current event review. I learned a lot during it as well. This is such an important topic to discuss as it is common in so many women's lives. It is important to recognize that these synthetic drugs have repercussions in the future.
Gigi Chrappa
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This week, I decided to read Nina’s review of the article, “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds” as the title peaked my interest. Nina’s review was very well thought out and extremely thorough. She successfully explains the correlation and study between birth control pills and breast cancer. I found this particularly interesting as birth control is an extremely common form of contraception, yet it may have serious consequences. It was interesting to read a review which detailed this relationship. This was an extremely interesting read as birth control is so common today. I also found her article interesting as there is a lot of negative stigma surrounding birth control pills and it was interesting to see whether these claims that ‘birth control may lead to breast cancer’ were true or not. Nina also does a wonderful job of including reliable sources and personnel who provide insight on the topic. She includes references to special scientists which helps to authenticate her review (ethos) Lastly, in addition to writing a stellar review, Nina succeeded in critiquing the article in a professional fashion. She skillfully approached the article and determined the ‘weak’ areas that could be improved upon. This is a great ability to have, especially when dealing with and giving constructive criticism to peers in the workforce.
Although Nina wrote a superb review, there are areas in which she could improve upon (as there always are). It might be interesting for Nina to continue this research and actually find additional outside information to include in her next review. Since this study has been going on for a while, there must be a decent amount of information on the topic online. It would be interesting to see if she could find another study and see what those results looked like in comparison to this current study. In addition to this, although she includes references to several scientists, she may want to include opinions from other scientists (not directly related to the study), both agreeing and disagreeing with the results. This would allow for the audience to make informed opinions as they would be given both points of view. I also appreciated how she chose an article that dealt with the topics we are learning in class. She did an exceptional job relating the topic to us and our class.
Overall, I read a well-written and engaging review on an important article. I soon plan to go back and read the article her review was based on because I believe her topic to be extremely interesting. Interestingly enough, I actually decided to read Nina’s review because the title of her review peaked my interest. However, after reading her review, I feel more inclined to read the article as Nina was able to provide a wonderful review.
Ava Austi
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Current Event #11
12/12/17
Rabin, Roni Caryn. “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds.” The New York Times, The New York Times, 6 Dec. 2017, www.nytimes.com/2017/12/06/health/birth-control-breast-cancer-hormones.html?rref=collection%2Fsectioncollection%2Fhealth&action=click&contentCollection=health®ion=rank&module=package&version=highlights&contentPlacement=1&pgtype=sectionfront.
Nina wrote a great review based off the article “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds” by Roni Caryn Rabin from The New York Times. This article addressed the increased chance of developing breast cancer in women using hormonal contraceptives. Throughout the review of the article, there were many aspects that Nina did well in order to write a great review. Firstly, Nina did a great job of adding quotes from Dr. Marisa Weiss who has done research on this topic. For example, “Gynecologists just assumed a lower dose of hormone meant a lower risk of cancer. But the same elevated risk is there. It’s small but it’s measurable, and if you add up the millions of women taking the pill, it is a significant public health concern.” Nina is aware that her audience may not be aware of the studies completed on this issue so she is sure to quote the experts and list her names, adding credibility. Adding quotes also allows the reader to have an understanding of the exact research going on, while giving them a sense of tone presented throughout the writing. Nina also does a great job in her use of vocabulary. It was simple to understand and all of her terms are defined if they are not commonly used. Lastly, Nina did a very nice job in the third paragraph where she discusses the strengths and weaknesses of the article’s writing. She provided multiple areas in which the author could improve as well as areas in which the author successfully presented her information. Nina successfully wrote a clear and interesting review of the article she read.
Although Nina presented a great review of the article, there were some aspects where she could have improved. First, Nina told the audience that there was a study done about this topic but she did not go on to tell the details of what exactly was done in the study. Rather than telling the reader just the results, it would have been beneficial to include details about what exactly was done during the study. Also at times I found the structure of Nina’s review confusing. For example, after her first paragraph she gives a brief summary of the article she read then goes on to talk about the effects but then goes back to talking about something that was mentioned in the article. It would have been beneficial to combine the first and third paragraph so that it can avoid confusion for the audience. These issues are both easy to fix in order to make Nina’s review even better. Even though there were some parts of the review that Nina could have improved, I think she wrote a great review of the article.
I thought Nina did a great job in writing her review and I really enjoyed reading it. I found it interesting how even though birth controls are still linked to breast cancer, it is also noted that hormonal birth control reduces the risks of ovarian, colorectal and endometrial cancers later in life. I chose this article because of the large number of women who rely on birth control contraceptive and that it is closely related to the unit we are learning in class today. I’m glad I read Nina’s review and after reading it, I want to learn more about this topic. Overall, I think Nina successfully wrote a clear and detailed review of her article.
Charlie Gay
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Mr. Ippolito
AP Biology
Current Events 11
Rabin, Roni Caryn. “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds.” The New York Times, The New York Times, 6 Dec. 2017.
www.nytimes.com/2017/12/06/health/birth-control-breast-cancer-hormones.html?rref=collection%2Fsectioncollection%2Fhealth&action=click&contentCollection=health®ion=rank&module=package&version=highlights&contentPlacement=1&pgtype=sectionfront.
I really enjoyed reading Nina Veru’s review on the article “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds.” One thing that Nina does very well is that she includes stats from the article. For example, she wrote “ The study found that out of 100,000 women on birth control, there were 68 breast cancer patients compared to 55 cases of breast cancer out of 100,000 non-users.” These states allow the readers to hear quantitative evidence and form their own opinions on the information. I also liked how Nina included quotes from the article. For example, she wrote, “Weiss claims, “Gynecologists just assumed a lower dose of hormone meant a lower risk of cancer. But the same elevated risk is there. It’s small but it’s measurable, and if you add up the millions of women taking the pill, it is a significant public health concern.” This allows the reader to hear information directly from an expert and adds to the credibility of Nina’s review. Lastly, I liked how Nina included the credentials of the people that she quoted. For example, she wrote, “Dr. Marisa Weiss is an oncologist, who founded breastcancer.org. Throughout her career, she has been studying hormones effects on cancer.” This further adds to the credibility of her quote. It allows the reader to realize that the quote of this person is something they should value and read carefully.
Although Nina wrote a great review there are some things that she could have improved on. One thing that she could have done better is she could have wrote more developed paragraphs. Her paragraphs were very small and did not develop many thoughts. The many paragraph format that she uses felt like there was too much jumping around of thoughts. Nina also could have improved on some of her grammatical errors. For example, she had some misplaced commas. She could have easily fixed this problem by reading over her work.
I really enjoyed reading this review. I chose this review because I remember reading about the negative effects of birth control in the textbook and I was interested to learn more. I had no idea that birth control pills resulted in breast cancer. I think that this research could be used to inform the female population on the negative effects of using birth control. This research could also be used to try and create a pill that does not possess these negative effects. Overall, Nina wrote a great review that I really enjoyed reading.
Kirsten Ircha 12/14/17
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Citation:
Rabin, Roni Caryn. “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds.” The New
York Times, The New York Times, 6 Dec. 2017, www.nytimes.com/2017/12/06/health/birth-control-breast-cancer-hormones.html?rref=collection%2Fsectioncollection%2Fhealth&action=click&contentCollection=health®ion=rank&module=package&version=highlights&contentPlacement=1&pgtype=sectionfront.
My fellow colleague, Nina Veru wrote an insightful review on the article, “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds,” by Roni Caryn Rabin. To begin, Nina does an amazing job of separating her paragraphs into short and relevant segments. By doing so, each paragraph in concise and engaging enough to mainina readers’ interest. Furthermore, this makes the review far easier to follow and understand. Nina also includes a very insightful summary of the article. This provides the reader with the necessary and key information needed to comprehend the rest of the review. Moreover, her summary uses basic language that allows a broad range of audiences and ages to apprehend the piece. Lastly, Nina includes quotes from top scientist stating, “While comparing older birth control to younger ones, Weiss claims, “Gynecologists just assumed a lower dose of hormone meant a lower risk of cancer. But the same elevated risk is there. It’s small but it’s measurable, and if you add up the millions of women taking the pill, it is a significant public health concern.”” By providing the opinions highly regarded scientist, the pieces is seen as more legitimate and supported by fact.
Although I enjoyed the article, I feel a couple of areas could be easily improved. Throughout the piece a casual and somewhat conversational tone is used. As this is more of an academic piece, I feel that a more sophisticated tone should be used. This can be improved through using more advanced vocabulary and avoiding simple of juvenile words and phrases. I also feel that some points made in the piece were overly stressed or repetitive. This makes the overall review appear less advance. This issue can be solved in the future through stating each idea only once and making sure not to restate ideas multiple times.
What shocked me most in the piece is when Nina claims, “The study also mentioned how as you age, the risk for cancer increases. Therefore older women who use hormonal contraceptives are at a much elevated risk for breast cancer opposed to those who are not.” This is so surprising because I had previously believed that all ages were at equal risk of developing cancers. This will greatly change my life as I am deeply interested in the topic and will continue to follow updates on the issue in the future.
Julia Pabafikos
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Current Event #11
December 14, 2017
Rabin, Roni Caryn. “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds.” The New York Times, The New York Times, 6 Dec. 2017, www.nytimes.com/2017/12/06/health/birth-control-breast-cancer-hormones.html?rref=collection%2Fsectioncollection%2Fhealth&action=click&contentCollection=health®ion=rank&module=package&version=highlights&contentPlacement=1&pgtype=sectionfront.
Nina Veru did a great job reviewing her article “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds.” by Roni Caryn Rabin. I particularly enjoyed how Nina went into detail and stated how a large percentage of women use oral contraceptives and therefore is important that this study is continued. By being able to connect to at least half of her audience, which are women she is able to state how this is a problem that can affect any woman on birth control. Additionally I enjoyed that Nina mentioned the different types of cancers that can be produced from the hormone in birth control. Although we may think that ovarian cancer would be the only cancer to arise, Nina also mentions that colorectal, and endometrial cancers can occur in later in life. Lastly, I enjoyed how Nina has short and concise paragraphs that got to the point fairly quickly and makes it very easy for her reader to follow along with her arguments.
However, I do believe that Nina had two areas in her review in which she could improve upon. Primarily, I would recommend that after she states “In older methods of birth control, the hormone estrogen was used and shown to have associated risks” Nina could further her argument and create a better for her reader by stating some of those “associated risks” she broadly mentions. By doing so I believe she’d be able to further her point of how important this study for everyone, but especially women. Additionally, I would encourage Nina to go analyze the quote she uses by Dr. Marisa Weiss in order to make it clearer to her audience what the purpose of adding this quote was.
Overall, Nina did a great job creating a well written review that illustrates some of the risks for women that take birth control. I personally chose to read this article because of the title and how most often when women buy birth control they want to avoid getting pregnant and don’t quite think about the effect these hormones that are contained in birth control can do to their bodies down the line. Through reading about this research I believe it provided me with a clear understanding of not only birth control but also the effects of certain hormones on the female body.
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Current Event Comment 11
Mr. Ippolito
December 13, 2017
Rabin, Roni Caryn. “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds.” The New York Times, The New York Times, 6 Dec. 2017, www.nytimes.com/2017/12/06/health/birth-control-breast-cancer-hormones.html?rref=collection%2Fsectioncollection%2Fhealth&action=click&contentCollection=health®ion=rank&module=package&version=highlights&contentPlacement=1&pgtype=sectionfront.
I chose to read Nina Veru’s current event article on Roni Caryn Rabin’s “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds,” from the New York Times. While reading Nina’s review, I took note on how she did a great thorough job of summarizing the article in her first paragraph. It is important to introduce the topic you are discussing in order for the reader to become familiar with it. In this summary, she began with a vague topic sentence to explain what the article was on. Then, she continued with specific details to further elaborate on her more general statement. Another aspect to the review that I thought was well done, was Nina’s explanation for why she chose the article; it shows that she was not only interested in the topic, but also able to connect it to the world. Lastly, she was able to elaborate concisely on the both commendable and lacking areas of the article. Although Nina did a great job, there were some areas that could have been improved upon. For example, in the statement, “Dr. Marisa Weiss Is an oncologist, who founded breastcancer.org,” that is an incomplete sentence. Also, there are some grammatical errors in it. This can be improved upon by proof reading. Another area of improvement would be in her second paragraph. She incorporates a quote directly from the article, however, she does not provide an explanation after it so it leaves the reader hanging.
I learned a lot while reading Nina’s current event review. This is an important discussion topic as it is relevant to society as it becomes more common. I was not well versed in how birth control was linked to breast cancer, so after I read the review, I felt a lot more aware of the topic at hand. Although there were some aspect to the review that could use minor improving, Nina did a great job overall.
Mairead Cain
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A.P. Biology
15 December 2017
Rabin, Roni Caryn. “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds.” The New York Times, The New York Times, 6 Dec. 2017, www.nytimes.com/2017/12/06/health/birth-control-breast-cancer-hormones.html?rref=collection%2Fsectioncollection%2Fhealth&action=click&contentCollection=health®ion=rank&module=package&version=highlights&contentPlacement=1&pgtype=sectionfront.
Nina did a very nice job with her current event review on the article “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds.” from The New York Times. I decided to review her report as the title of the original article is rather intriguing and raises many questions. There are many good techniques she uses throughout the report. One example is how she gives exact numbers concerning how many women were involved in the study. This allows readers a deeper understanding and familiarity with the topic at hand. Another aspect of Nina’s writing that was done rather well was how she named the specific sources that the original article got the information from. This allows readers to fully trust the information relayed as it is from a valid research. Lastly, I appreciated how Nina found opportunities to interject quotes into her current event report. These quotes gave relevant information and therefore a deeper understanding of the source material being used.
Overall, Nina’s report was extremely interesting and informative, however there are some details that she could tweak and add to make her current event article even that much stronger.
I recommend that she explains how, exactly, the discoveries being made will impact the future of women taking birth control. This would have been beneficial because it would have given readers an insight on the future of the information collected and described in the article. Also, she could have added some of her own opinions concerning the information at hand and maybe even her own ideas on how to educate the world of the research findings. This would have further granted readers an insight about the future of the research findings and even the eventual results from the research.
Nina’s report was very informative and I learned extensively about how recent studies have indicated that birth control may, in fact, cause breast cancer. Before reading the report, I had little knowledge about how birth control, a substance which countless women take, could be leading to breast cancer. It is definitely important that this information is relayed across the world and possibly a better drug is manufactured.
David Weild
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Current Event #11
12/15/17
Rabin, Roni Caryn. “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds.” The New York Times, The New York Times, 6 Dec. 2017, www.nytimes.com/2017/12/06/health/birth-control-breast-cancer-hormones.html?rref=collection%2Fsectioncollection%2Fhealth&action=click&contentCollection=health®ion=rank&module=package&version=highlights&contentPlacement=1&pgtype=sectionfront.
Nina did a good job with her current event review on the article “Birth Control Pills Still Linked to Breast Cancer, Study Finds” from The New York Times. I chose to review her review because I wanted to know if and why these all-mighty pills cause cancer. In her review, she does many things well. The literary techniques she uses throughout the report are exceptional. One example these techniques is using statistics of the women in the study. This allows a deeper understanding for the reader of the participants. Something else that Nina did well was citing information with quotes directly from the text. As well as using literary elements like backing up with statistics, quotes enable a deeper understanding of the text as well. Nina also placed the quotes exceptionally. how Nina found opportunities to interject quotes into her current event report. They were always relevant and enhanced the reader's experience.
Overall I thought she did a good job however I thought she could have touched up her work a little bit. She should explain the discoveries which were made and how they will impact the women’s future. This would work well because it would give readers an insight on the future of the information collected and described in the article. In addition, I would have enjoyed if she had shared her own opinions on this matter. This would have enhanced the reader’s experience.
This report was simply quality and I was able to learn a tremendous amount about the dangers of birth control. It is sad to know that such a helpful drug causes cancer and that women will use it less. Before reading the report, I did not know this drug could cause cancer. I think there should be more studies on this matter to find out if this is for real.