Alexander Plaza
11/7/16
AP Biology
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O'connor, Anahad. "Putting Sugary Soda Out of Reach." The New York Times. The New York Times, 03 Nov. 2016. Web. 07 Nov. 2016.
The article I read, "Putting Sugary Soda Out of Reach.", by Anahad O'connor, discusses a recent study on University of California San Francisco employees whose consumption of sugary drinks stopped. The institution took all sugary soft drinks away from campus stores and studied the effects on the employees. The study showed a significant drop of soda consumption with all participants. The study comes during a time where many states are considering taxing sugary drinks to discourage people from buying the drinks. The World Health Organization is even urging “countries around the world to impose a tax on sugary drinks, presenting research that showed just a 20 percent increase in soda prices would result in a proportionate reduction in their consumption”. The soda industry is understandably fighting back pointing out that the obesity rate continues to rise even with the decline of sugary drink consumption. The full effects on health of the study are yet to be seen.
This study is a step in the right direction in the fight against obesity. Obesity is a very large problem within this country and the precedent set by the university will most likely spur many other colleges to follow. It will be interesting to see the possible increase in regulation of sugary drinks because taxes and bans may become a reality in the not so distant future. It will affect many citizens within the United States, regardless of health.
Overall, I felt this article did a good job of raising awareness for this topic. The article explains the study well and goes on to describe similar arguments within the subject of sugary drinks. I believe that the article is somewhat misleading since it is published before the full effects of the ban on sugary drinks are found. It would be better to publish this article after the results of the study were determined.
O'connor, Anahad. "Putting Sugary Soda Out of Reach." The New York Times. The New York Times, 03 Nov. 2016. Web. 07 Nov. 2016.
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Alex’s review of Putting Sugary Soda Out of Reach was a very interesting review. I liked how he was really thorough on what the study was testing and its results. This strengthened his review as it helped ensure that there is no confusion about the overall study and the following results. In addition, the fact that he went further and deeper than the study at the University of California San Francisco added to his review as it was more detailed and not just focused on one aspect of this topic which overall aided me in understanding this topic better and gave me some additional information about it. Finally, the last thing that I thought Alex did very well was putting a quote of the article in his review. Not only was this quote about the World Health Organization, which added to his review by not making it only about the study, but it also incorporated statistics which helped me understand the significance of the topic Alex was talking about.
Although this review was well written, one way it could have been made better is that Alex could have been a bit more detailed in his second paragraph as I thought it was a bit short which gave the impression that this had been done quickly. So by adding one or two more sentences to that second paragraph, Alex could have avoided this problem. Moreover, he stated that the soda industry was fighting back but did not offer any other details about it. I would have liked to read more about this topic as I think this is very interesting. By just putting in some of details about the soda industry, it would really enhance this review.
Overall, this review was captivating and taught me about a study that I had never learned about before. I had never heard about this problem of soft sugary drinks that could be causing many health problems but I had no idea that some people were actually thinking of putting a tax on them so that people would stop buying these sodas. Thus, learning about this was very enlightening and taught me many new things. Reading this review made me realize that people have started standing up to the soda industry and have realized the awful effects of these drinks. This review really got me to think more about the subject of taxes and prohibition of certain products.
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I read Alex’s review of the article “Putting Sugary Soda Out of Reach” by Anahad O’connor. I thought that it was a very interesting article and that Alex did a good job reviewing it. The article was based off of a study between sugary sodas and employees at the University of California San Francisco. I like how he added additional information regarding soda in the United States, and went deeper into the issue. I also liked how he put in a quote from the article into his review, this made the review more credible and also easier to understand.
One thing I think Alex could have improved on is making his review a little longer and explaining certain points in more detail. For example explaining more of the effects that the sugary soda’s have on people and how the ban and taxes will affect them. I think this topic is very interesting because obesity is a problem in the United States so it's interesting to see what people and the government are trying to do about it.
Overall I thought that the article was very interesting and I want to learn more about it. I had not heard of this study done at the University and I'm curious to see if other schools do similar things. I knew that sugary sodas had been known to cause some health problems but I did not know that they were thinking of putting a tax on the soda to try and stop people from buying it. This article was very intriguing and I think that Alex did a good job reviewing it.
One thing I appreciated about about Alex's review is the relevance of the topic he chose. I also liked how Alex included a quote to help the reader better understand the WHO's position on the matter. Finally, I liked how Alex extrapolated his original point and related it to issues of obesity throughout the country and the political fight between large corporations that produce soda and the US government.
ReplyDeleteAlex could have improved his review by further explaining the study he discussed, because it did not make any sense to me. I am confused as to why it is significant that soda consumption went down after it was banned. I also think that Alex could have improved grammar in order to help the reader understand the points he made throughout the review.
I remember when Bloomberg tried to ban sodas in NYC a few years ago, and there was massive uproar against this action. As more and more states ponder taxing sugary sodas to counter the country's massive obesity problem, it is interesting to read about institutions such as UCSF taking matters into their own hands.
Margaux Frohlich
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O'connor, Anahad. "Putting Sugary Soda Out of Reach." The New York Times. The New York Times, 03 Nov. 2016. Web. 07 Nov. 2016.
I read Alex Plaza’s review of, "Putting Sugary Soda Out of Reach" by Anahad O'connor. I think he did a great job with his review. I think Alex did a good job in his summary. His use of words from the article inputted in the summary helped the reader get a greater sense of the type of language the article used. He states, ‘The World Health Organization is even urging “countries around the world to impose a tax on sugary drinks, presenting research that showed just a 20 percent increase in soda prices would result in a proportionate reduction in their consumption”’. This helped the reader see what the article was talking about precisely, and the language used. Alex’s second paragraph was very clear as well. He provided a clear understanding of the article. He was able to explain his point of view on it and how he thought it would impact the future. I did agree with his statements so I do believe that he had a clear understanding of this article as did I. And lastly, the last part that I like is just the article that he chose overall. It is not a complex science article but instead is very relatable to most people today. Obesity is one of the most dangerous things that people suffer from and is one of the most leading causes of death. So if this research can help benefit future generations, hopefully it could help everybodies health.
Although I thought that Alex did a very good job on his review, there were two things that I thought that he could have improved upon. First off, I think that he could have explained the risks soda can cause to a human. I think it would have given the reader a greater understanding as to why this is such a problem. And a second aspect is that I think he could work on is possibly putting in quotes from the researchers who were working on this research. It could have made the summary come to live a little.
Overall, I did enjoy this review and the article that he chose. It was nice to know
that there was research being conducted on this which I had never known about before. I hope that it continues.
Charlotte Prior
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AP Biology
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O'connor, Anahad. "Putting Sugary Soda Out of Reach." The New York Times. The New York Times, 03 Nov. 2016. Web. 07 Nov. 2016.
I read Alex Plaza’s review of the article called “Putting Sugary Soda Out of Reach”, published in the New York Times. I liked the topic Alex chose, and he did a good job of choosing something that is relevant to topics being discussed in today’s world. I also thought it was well organized that he provided proof from the article by putting a quote into his reponse. It shows that he actually read the article and found the important things to focus on. He also did a good job of introducing the study by giving the first few sentences of the review to explain the location and reason for the study. One thing I think Alex could improve on is some of his punctuation use, there are just a couple commas he needs to add. I also think his review would be even better if it was a little longer, and he added a bit more to the possible theories and hypotheses that will come from the study. I enjoyed reading his review and I hadn't heard about this study, I thought it was interesting that they were able to remove all the soft drinks from the campus stores in order to complete this.
Allison Barker
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November 17, 2016
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O'connor, Anahad. "Putting Sugary Soda Out of Reach." The New York Times. The New York Times, 03 Nov. 2016. Web. 07 Nov. 2016.
I found Alex’s review of the article “Putting Sugary Soda Out of Reach,” by Anahad O’Connor, very informative and interesting, as obesity is a topic that has been in the public eye for years. I liked that Alex explained what was done in the study that this article discussed, as it gave the reader an idea of what the results meant and of the importance of the study. I also appreciated that Alex included a quote from the article about statistics surrounding possible solutions to the obesity problem, as the evidence supporting the tax on soda proposed by the World Health Organization made me more likely to believe what they were suggesting and allowed me to make my own informed opinion about the topic. Further, I liked that Alex tied the importance of the article to all Americans, not just the ones who are affected by obesity. This allowed every reader, regardless of how they feel about obesity, to feel an emotional tie to the issues being discussed.
Although I greatly enjoyed Alex’s review, there were a couple of things that he could have done to make the review even better and more informative. First, I found a few grammar mistakes in his review, and I believe that, if there were no mistakes, the review would have been more cohesive and I would have remained equally invested in the issue at hand without being distracted. Second, I would have appreciated more statistics relating to the study and obesity, especially statistics that explained the outcome of the study. Alex vaguely outlined the results of the study, but concrete statistics would have allowed me to have a complete understanding of the study’s implications.
Overall, I really enjoyed this review and found the subject matter to be very interesting. I was surprised that a 20% increase in soda price led to a proportionate drop in sales. This has big implications for everyone who consumes soda, and I had no idea that the effect of a price increase was so dramatic.
AP Biology George Daskalakis
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O'connor, Anahad. "Putting Sugary Soda Out of Reach." The New York Times. The New York
Times, 03 Nov. 2016. Web. 07 Nov. 2016.
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Alex did a fantastic job in reviewing the article “Putting Sugary Soda Out of Reach”. The first thing Alex did very well was imputing a quote of the article in his review. Not only did this quote concern the World Health Organization, but it also incorporated statistics which helpful in understanding the topic at hand. Secondly, I really enjoyed how Alex was thorough on what the study was testing. This strengthened his review as it ensured that there was no confusion about the study. Finally, Alex went further and deeper than the study and added additional and more detailed information which was crucial to the information in the review.
Although this review was well constructed, there are several ways in which it can be improved. One way it could have been improved is that Alex stated that the soda industry was fighting back but did not offer any other details about it. It would have been more helpful to read more about this topic. In addition, Alex could have been a more detailed in his second paragraph because it was on the short side, which did not show much effort. By adding a couple more ideas would have enhanced that paragraph.
Overall, this review was very detailed and taught me about subject I had little prior knowledge on. I learned how sugary drinks could be causing health problems but also learned that some people were actually putting a tax on them would call for people to stop buying these sodas. Reading this review made me realize that people have started to make changes to the soda industry and have realized the awful effects of these drinks. This review really got me to think twice before I have a soda next time.
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There were multiple positive aspects of Alex’s review on the article “Putting Sugary Soda Out of Reach.” First, Alex did a good job of concisely yet thoroughly summarizing the article and the study. Briefly, the study examined the effects of a reduction on soda consumption and found a positive impact on the problem of obesity. Second, Alex’s incorporation of a quote from the World Health Organization certainly strengthened his position and review. Third, Alex made a strong connection between the article and the problems of obesity in our society. All in all, this was a strong and well-written review.
While the review was generally well written, there were a few aspects that could of Alex’s review that could be improved. There were multiple points at which Alex could have improved his sentences structure in order to more clearly portray his ideas to the reader. Additionally, Alex could have strengthened his review by discussing the ways in which soda companies were fighting against further regulation.
I enjoyed reading Alex’s review, as it is very relevant to society. Obesity is a major problem in America and measures must be taken to combat it. As this study suggests, one part of the solution could be raising the price of soda in order to reduce soda consumption. The article and study were indeed quite interesting.
Evelyn Kluemper
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O'Connor, Anahad. "Putting Sugary Soda Out of Reach." The New York Times. The New York Times, 03 Nov. 2016. Web. 07 Nov. 2016.
Alex’s review of “Putting Sugary Soda Out of Reach” is interesting. He incorporated a relevant quote that made the review more engaging to readers. Alex included a statement by the World Health Organization, which is a highly respected agency of the United Nations. Additionally, his critique was honest.
I think that Alex’s review would be better if he explained some consequences of drinking excessive amounts of soda. Also, it would have been interesting if he included the hypothesis of the study and more background information.
I found it very interesting that the government would impose a tax on soda, which seems excessive. However, I do agree that something must be done to bring attention to the effects of sugary soda, since obesity is a huge problem in this country.
O'connor, Anahad. "Putting Sugary Soda Out of Reach." The New York Times. The New York
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In Alex’s review of “Putting Sugary Soda Out of Reach,” he did a good job of summarizing the article. I was able to get a good idea of what the article was about and what the significance of the research is. In addition, Alex did a good job of relating the article to society. He states that obesity is a major problem for our country and how this research can help to put forth new taxes to prevent people from buying sugary drinks. One last thing Alex did a good job of was pointing out how the article is misleading because it was published before the full effects of banning sugary drinks were established.
On the other hand, I think Alex could make his review better. I think he could’ve added how this topic affects him personally. He only mentions how it is connected to the major obesity problem the country has, but adding how this tax can affect the other people of the country could be interesting as well. In addition, I think he could explain the effect on the human body that drinking too many sugary drinks has. This would help the reader understand why people are so eager to ban sugary drinks.
I chose this article because of the title. I do not like soda and am very aware of the negative effects it can have on the body, so I wanted to find out what was being done. I learned from reading this article that increasing the price can decrease the consumption of sugary drinks. Before I thought that if people wanted a sugary drink, they would buy it no matter what. But now I understand that some people will not continue to buy sugary drinks if it is more of an economic burden. This article will make me continue to not purchase sugary drinks and try to urge my friends and family to limit their intake of sugary drinks.